Monday, January 16, 2012

What do you think of this exerpt from my book?

wow it's great, but maybe you should say what color his tousled hair was, and how he looked at that moment, like his appearance. give more details. like how did his voice sound? deep and husky...? give more details. but other than that it was great!! id like to read more!

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